I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
Today I made a DLO about Kids Can and what they do. So in my DLO there are people giving someone a pair of shoes and then a brief explanation about Kids Can and what they do. Overall it was a fun activity.
Thanks for sharing your CIP work to your blog. I enjoy seeing the creative DLOs that you have been working on. I wonder if you can remember what we talked about regarding the capital letters on every word? You only need capitals for beginning of sentences or names/places.
Hi Callum I really like your post. It is well made and has a lot of info. Same as Miss Birtch I think you need to put the capitals at the start of the sentences or on names. Also what happened to their legs? Apart from that good job!
Hi Callum I like how you didn't take picture for the web.Next time you can put full stops what happed to the robot legs nice# work Callum keep it up. Saia
Hi Callum I really like this blog post that you have made I like how you made the two characters and how one is giving the other a pair of shoes. I like how you explained what was happening and why you made this but maybe for next time I think you could add in a bit more writing but overall I think you made a very good post and keep up the good work.
Hi Callum I like the way you added the two aliens. The good thing is that one is giving the other shoes. Maybe you can mak the other alien say thank you. What do you think you can do next time?
Please structure your comments as follows: Positive - Something done well Thoughtful - A sentence to let us know you actually read/watched or listened to what they had to say Helpful - Give some ideas for next time or Ask a question you want to know more about
Hi Callum
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing your CIP work to your blog. I enjoy seeing the creative DLOs that you have been working on. I wonder if you can remember what we talked about regarding the capital letters on every word? You only need capitals for beginning of sentences or names/places.
This is a quick fix for next time.
- Miss Birtch
Hi Callum I really like your post. It is well made and has a lot of info. Same as Miss Birtch I think you need to put the capitals at the start of the sentences or on names. Also what happened to their legs? Apart from that good job!
ReplyDeleteHi Callum I like how you didn't take picture for the web.Next time you can put full stops what happed to the robot legs nice# work Callum keep it up.
ReplyDeleteSaia
Hi Callum I really like this blog post that you have made I like how you made the two characters and how one is giving the other a pair of shoes. I like how you explained what was happening and why you made this but maybe for next time I think you could add in a bit more writing but overall I think you made a very good post and keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi Callum I like the way you added the two aliens.
ReplyDeleteThe good thing is that one is giving the other shoes.
Maybe you can mak the other alien say thank you.
What do you think you can do next time?