I am a student at in Uru MÄnuka. In 2020 I was a year 9 and in 2021 I will be a year 10. This is a place where I will be able to share my learning with you. Please note....some work won't be edited - just my first drafts, so there may be some surface errors. I would love your feedback, comments, thoughts and ideas.
I saw bumps on my lemon that looked like holes. It smelt spicy and really fresh. When i saw the lemons cut up on the desk I was excited. They looked a lot like American footballs.I really liked the lemons.
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That is amazing how you described the lemon
ReplyDeletenice callum looks pretty good next time you could add more agetives.
ReplyDeleteNice similes you could improve on your paragraph by adding more adjectives
ReplyDeletesome good describing words and langue
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