Today we were learning how to make quality blog comments so we had to find a comment and improve it and i picked this one.
Great work Josiah. Wow hunting in the Paralympics, that would be interesting. Do you like hunting?
And this is what i made it into.
Amazing work Josiah. I like how you picked hunting but for the Paralympics. Im wondering how would the blind people participate in it because how would they know what they're shooting at and how would they know where they are? I´m wondering if you like hunting do you?
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